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It's Simple (Haiku) by Enkidu

I give and give and give and give and give but I will never take you back

lmp 14-Jun-07/11:00 AM
one extra syllable in line 2; try "I'll" or maybe just "will".

perhaps try using other words beside "give" 5 times. i am sure there are other things you do, such as forgave, tryusted, loved, etc. might help paint the picture better if you explain how much you gave...




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