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Melancholy Tart (Free verse) by Skamper

After dinner - reclining sofa-shaped draping thoughts invade the spaces left bare by sustenance I sigh - remain focused on the middle distance barely aware of my son’s insistence his constant mentioning of something sweet A treat – “I feel a little melancholy” I whisper to no-one in particular - the boy hears with those hopeful ears “Is that a cake?” he asks – I shake my head “No, it’s a vegetable” an inattentive answer but - incredibly he wonders if it’s kinda like sweet potato pie!

Skamper 11-Jun-07/4:33 PM
Hmmm...I think there was too much of me in this write. It's meant to be more about the boy, and his focus on his own thoughts. Also I was aiming for light-hearted...lol...will definately have to work on that! Thanks for your input, all appreciated.




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