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Persnickety (Other) by malpaso

well, ain't that a hang, banged up by the technology that was supposed to save you and I. I could have saved a dime, killed time, made rhyme but I chose to click a mouse, burn down the house, see what the chicken saw when he crossed road, played Faust. Here in the forsaken Expanse

sca 9-Jun-07/12:42 AM
I think this could be expanded on, lines changes and lengthened, others added. Fatten up the story if you will - the story's clear but the details aren't.

=> Jess




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