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The Corner Tavern (Free verse) by jessicazee

Pulltabs and buzz-ins, raffles, a current holiday mood Surprise me with your jukebox and play me one stringy song for vinyl perching stools, for nicknames and pleasantries for weeping chilled mugs and dogs who drink beer I'll give you a crispy dollar to hear the one about the wheels and how they go round and how I'm watching them

sca 6-Jun-07/2:45 AM
Hm, I like this and I don't.

I like how you desribe things, in themselves, but I don't like the repetition. Kitch language (which I like), but then again the repetition of words like and and for and how kind of drown it out.

But I mean, we're talking personal tastes here. You know how it's best read, not me lol.




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