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The Editor (Free verse) by Dovina

Had he given me just one, or half a dozen from his cache, poems to read and check, and make suggestions on, I’d judge each one by look and feel, like buying fruit from unknown trees. But after holding, feeling forty, I sense a tree with grafted limbs. The fruit grow each unique, but carry something from the whole. I almost see the trunk and branches, how they spread and where they aim, their bent and pretty form. My tone is altered by such poems. In seeing things unseen by him, I see them partly through his eyes.

drnick 30-Apr-07/3:01 PM
I didn't like the comparison in line 6, but after seeing how you developed it I changed my mind. This is very well written, but I'm not sure what you mean by "My tone is altered by such poems." How is your tone altered, and why? It just doesn't seem to fit right there. Anyways, great job!




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