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Worn Ruse (Free verse) by drnick

He'd like to touch you But you're not there. You're in a worn ruse He cannot see through. Silence guides in Thoughts, fears, lies. You will crush him A mind of depression. He'll contrive Your false mind And you'll do What you need to. Logic signs Pass him by Another worn ruse He will not see through.

richa 30-Apr-07/3:53 AM
I like the first verse. The second is rather overwrought fears, lies, depression etc. Try not no be so wise about the character. Let him act in the poem.




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