poetandknowit15 Sep 2002

When your robe slips open and you tell him to beat it. That was a great Freudian slip. What did you really want Balth? Hmmm. But really, quite nice in places. I personally would remove the goddamn. It has more of an effect without it. I don't know I am also not a fan of dialogue in poems, but that is just me. And didn't you find a mate who let you loaf at the typewriter all day. It is important work! Half of being a good writer is finding a significant other with a fantastic job!!!!