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What it Feels Like (Free verse) by laurahenn2010

A touch of your skin on mine A brush of our lips as they touch A look into your eyes A smile completes the rush A touch on my waist The close of a moments kiss To open my eyes and see the only thing that matters It's how I describe my heavenly bliss Arms wrapped around me My head lies on your chest Hearing the breath escape our lips This is how it must feel to be perfectly at rest

Ranger 26-Apr-07/9:40 AM
If you're just starting out on the poetic road, this probably doesn't deserve the kicking it's got. It's true that it's full of cliche and vague sensation, but you have to start somewhere. Find a poet you enjoy reading and try to work out what tricks they use. Imagery, metaphor, meter etc. etc. etc. are all things to practise as you go - especially look for strong images and novel way of describing them. Rhyming dictionaries are also good resources; the best rhymer on here (zodiac) always claimed to use them.

Keep at it, listen to the criticism and ignore the insults. You'll be fine.




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