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The Corner Tavern (Free verse) by jessicazee

Pulltabs and buzz-ins, raffles, a current holiday mood Surprise me with your jukebox and play me one stringy song for vinyl perching stools, for nicknames and pleasantries for weeping chilled mugs and dogs who drink beer I'll give you a crispy dollar to hear the one about the wheels and how they go round and how I'm watching them

jessicazee 26-Apr-07/2:25 AM
philos,
thanks for your thoughtful comments. I think you're right with "stringy". I want that line to read "summer songs, a sing-along". (?)
And the "current" holiday mood I was going for, um, like whatever holiday is upcoming, the bar's decorations foretell & anticipate that. (i.e. lighted shamrocks & leprechaun cut-outs). Maybe I will expand & elaborate.
Yes about the last bit, a song on said jukebox and for the last two weeks burned hotly on my brain's iPod function.




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