poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Broken Clay by donmiguel1960.

Dovina16 Apr 2007

There's a good sentiment here that could be a good poem. Get rid of half the commas (faith, that - for example); clean up the grammar; and get rid of excess words (now in the last line, just in the penultimate line) and fix the spelling - families, their.