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The Finding (Free verse) by Skamper

the T.V. set to blaring comatose shapes arranged various contemplated positionings red eyes find the telling of mother’s fantasy lies over-compensating ears well-attuned to listening and minds too quick - for shadowey scenarios he’s back for better or worse - worsening fears spreadable ingestible and we watch the sickening march odd eyes glazing matting discards clinging and jostling for position - and the stench filling we – make the fussing bearable collecting babbling ideas relief in evidence bagged and tagged for later examination so – one returned and one due back we fear he lies too far beyond - the finding

Skamper 30-Mar-07/3:58 PM
Portentious? Meaning they are literally that, a search and a finding? Hmmm...That's exactly what the writes are about. I think this poem needs nothing, it works for me. There isn't anything lurking behind shadows, it's all there...a little scrambled but I like my ideas that way.




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