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Llamas (Free verse) by Skamper

Dead things resurrect the imaginings of child-like tantrums filling hollows and writhing in the shallows - strangled threads twist and wriggle to be free thoughts bumping stumbling apologising what’s right? seats reserved for those deserving the rest shuffle for places filling fast Teach me a polished way to speak slide your new tongue between the cracks where slighted words were tossed just because - I tired of them the page laughed creased and walked away shaking dog-eared head

drnick 29-Mar-07/3:21 PM
I'm not sure what is going on here, but I like that it's not obvious. I got the feeling of a mind furious with anxious thought, which seemed to work out well. Nice rhythem, as well.




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