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Tide (Free verse) by <~>

Sitting on the seawall Before the summer storm she said Something's slipped away Seven months slid by, and Snow laces the tide and Rides the currents in the greyed sky And chills my cheeks, burning Finds me drifting in memory and Furious with my own leaking With all this seeking a Meaning

[mojo] 13-Sep-02/3:08 PM
It doesn't take long to realise there are only a handful of people posting anything rewarding here. You are on my list. Is there very slight assonance between "seawall" and "summer storm"? Very subtle. "Tide,rides,sky" I'm a sucker for rhyme. "Furious with my own leaking" jars slightly, would appreciate explanation of this line.9.




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