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Tide (Free verse) by <~>

Sitting on the seawall Before the summer storm she said Something's slipped away Seven months slid by, and Snow laces the tide and Rides the currents in the greyed sky And chills my cheeks, burning Finds me drifting in memory and Furious with my own leaking With all this seeking a Meaning

balthazar 13-Sep-02/1:36 PM
Even better. Much. There is a lot going on in here in terms of pace and rhythm. Random alliteration and rhyme peppered in spurts and then the leaking, seeking, meaning, brings home the bacon (and fries it up in the pan). Swank.




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