beakism13 Sep 2002

Indeed, as the learned PAKI has said, while a haiku need not be a rigid 5-7-5, if anything it should be shorter: the brevity is crucial to the feeling; the images in your poem are too wordy to fit the style of the haiku. My encyclopedia suggests that a haiku should be short enough to say comfortable in one breath, which is not the case with your work. 8====D Beakism