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If she thinks if she believes (Other) by Prince of Void

If she thinks if she believes My love is based on lies Even so she will leave me then all my dreams're melting away Who knows what will happen After thousand times After thousand years I’m crying it out to all heavens But she is still lost in my arms But she is still the beloved in my heart How can I be without her? How many dawns I should see without her How many tears can show my despairs? To the madding crowd of this hell They make me down to the void If the void stays on If she never comes back again If the dream doesn’t meet tomorrow I? I will be the worst void Maybe in some age To come to see her again Where I won’t meet the sky alone When the battle is won Here in my heart Here in my soul From here to the eternity of love Then the delight will be reborn The ray will go beyond The Ocean of chaos and void

Dovina 16-Jan-07/11:29 AM
I think you mean "then" in Line 3, not "so". Even so, it's unnecessarily tied up in "if"'s.




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