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Brains for Barter (Free verse) by Dovina

I have no need to prove you wrong To show the triteness of your point No need to give the facts I’d rather find a joke you’ll like A memory pleasant on your mind I’d rather feel you grin Your breath falls warm upon my neck Your legs behind my chair feel strong Your lungs refresh the air I have the wind as if I’m running My wheels turn faster with each pun And slow with every pause How about a trade, my dear I’ll give you brains; you give me legs The hill is long and steep

Dovina 11-Jan-07/11:04 AM
Welcome back. Even one with whom I have fought is welcome back. The last line is cliché, I know, and will look for better words. The first verse needs to show that N, while smarter, feels no need to flaunt it – will consider flakiness.




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