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Brains for Barter (Free verse) by Dovina

I have no need to prove you wrong To show the triteness of your point No need to give the facts I’d rather find a joke you’ll like A memory pleasant on your mind I’d rather feel you grin Your breath falls warm upon my neck Your legs behind my chair feel strong Your lungs refresh the air I have the wind as if I’m running My wheels turn faster with each pun And slow with every pause How about a trade, my dear I’ll give you brains; you give me legs The hill is long and steep

Dovina 11-Jan-07/11:04 AM
Thanks, and good to see you back. Admittedly, those “I’d”s and “your” s are there mostly for rhythm, and don’t advance the meaning. Possibly they add to the personal emotion of N, for what that’s worth.




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