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We visited the gay men on the veranda (Free verse) by Frass

We visited the gay men on the veranda my wife and I traded nervous laughter and looks. So strange to me calling each other 'girl!' suddenly, whirling and crooning to an old Supremes hit another has a fit over some prankish indiscretion between his boyfriend and another blush-cheeked, man-child, loverly she-creatures I love them but, brotherly.

poetandknowit 13-Sep-02/8:36 AM
Funny or goofy? Hmmm. that is a tough one. Any way biker Frass, lol, 52 weeks a year. Did you visit the girls specifically or did you just happen to be on the veranda and visit "with" them. The nervous laughter and looks makes me think this is spontaneous which throws the title out of context and bothers me. Plus, it sounds just trite. Is this like the first time you have ever encountered anybody outside of your shell. I bet you just love seeing boys in lycra, muscles bulging, sweat pouring, pounding Gary Fisher pedals 52 weeks a year. ummm. Yummy. When I cum out to VA will you be my bitch?




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