poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Self Portrait by Dovina.

Ranger8 Dec 2006

Too many uses of 'his' in the first two lines for my liking - change it to '...dips a brush'. Not sure about a contemplative hat, but I do like the rest. 'Clad in kindness/optimistic likeness' is a really good bit of wordplay there.