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Reflection on time, a day in a life The ease and joy, the absence of strife A lull in the storm, the soul calm and still Impervious to pain imposed without will. The heart feels so light, like soft wind in the trees A harmonious companion, like feathers on the breeze The grace of this moment, the gift of this time An experience of freedom, the feeling? - sublime.

zapevaj 11-May-02/2:22 AM
The rhyme scheme sounds really imposed and contrived. I think this poem would do much better as free verse or with a more complex and less-frequently-used rhyme scheme.




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