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Crappy (Free verse) by drnick

Light rain slides down the window Sky painted a sloppy gray And if you fool yourself You'll walk with smile on your face Slimy rock and dirt your path Not a friend along the way You know not to kid yourself In fear of looking lame All you can imagine is some life So boring, sober, sane No need to kill yourself If existence has gone to Frey Sure you could rewrite the world Would that make you happy? And if you'd fool yourself You'll find you became too sappy

Shuushin 17-Oct-06/7:24 AM
It isn't really clear what this is about (in the poem - the commented reference makes it, if not meaningless, inconsequential).

rain sliding down the window is approximately as primitive as one can get when describing rain sliding down a window.




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