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Bitter (Free verse) by Ranger

Anna's ghost can stalk this swamp Can stalk, for all I care For she left me and wandered off While I sat in despair For she left me and wandered off And never told me where Anna's ghost can see herself Reflected, white and wan In rusty stagnant water's froth A dirtied, dying swan In rusty stagnant water's froth A-weeping thereupon Anna's ghost can sit among The rotting twists of trees And pluck her ragged strands of hair Which billow in the breeze And pluck her ragged strands of hair In harp-string minor keys Anna's ghost can howl and moan In sorrow, at the moon For he's the only one who'll hear Such lonely banshee tunes For he's the only one who'll hear This song; a wood-score hewn Anna's ghost can curse the day She left my company For other folk who left her there With no road back to me For other folk who left her there To die in her degree

Ranger 13-Oct-06/3:42 AM
Indeed I did think it'd go down well with you. I had to post something (I am killing myself over two other poems which resist all attempts to be written). I'll look at the edit for that line, although it'll mean playing with the iambs - but hell, if it works...
I actually love titles almost as much as the poetry itself; this one was just for the drafting so it's bound to change in the future.




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