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Dead Inside (Free verse) by drnick

My soul must be iron: Forged in fire but currently cold, crushing. The weight intense With structure long rusting. Bringin' me down, Like an anchor Through the ground. I make not a sound, And feel nothing.

Dovina 10-Oct-06/1:38 PM
Punctuation and grammar detract from a good start. It's really all one sentence.




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