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Innocence revisited (Free verse) by Caducus

Two spines laid on countless spines. Soil was brunette A body yard from virginal And my seed was unspent Until her declaration soddened her thigh And I cried on a shared sternum Where countless I love you’s Were wasted on from desire. It was Autumn I felt sorry for, And when I feel like falling – I return, To the spastic oak ravaged since by lightning That split our names into splinters. It is Autumn that took my innocence And not the brunette of spring.

nentwined 4-Oct-06/5:42 PM
"A body yard from virginal" makes me think there has to either be a typo somewhere, or a missing word--I get some gist of it from context, but well, lots of different some gists.

very interesting, though. I really like the second stanza, and just want the first to cohere a little more for me.




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