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untitled (Free verse) by harryparatestes

i have liquid gardens filled with forgotten tears and painful memories its on the outside of infinity just past the road of missed opportunity's thats where i go plant my aching heart when its broken,shattered,and torn apart theres a devil in every bush a joker in every tree and angels on the breeze that weep for me its in the state of depression or self suggestion whatever suits you best

pete 2-Oct-06/3:28 PM
not that i'm into angels but it would have worked better for me with " angels on every breeze..." ... also "opportunities" .... nit-picking i know but that's what we're here for... nice poem :)




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