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Peter (Free verse) by Wakeboarder20

A ghost appears in the form of a man. Speaking in parables about the unknown claiming to be the son of God. Through him I see a door wide open and beckoning. I find my courage and walk through leaving all I am behind on that rickety boat. The impossible becomes possible but stricken by logic the impossible strikes back. Screaming for help and sinking like a stone. He grabs my arm and saves me asking me why I would doubt lose faith in what I saw before me and what I never knew I could do but did all the same.

Dovina 2-Oct-06/1:55 PM
I agree that it seems of uncertain intent, as if the the narrator is searching for some truth. The first verse seems to be about Jesus and his parables. He calls himslef the Door, and the narrator walks through.

Then in Verse 2, Narroator gets confused about something that the poem does not describe. I think it would be stronger if you say what confuses him.

Verse 3 is mostly a repeat of Verse 2 and brings us no closer to an understanding of the confusion.




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