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Going to Michigan for the weekend (Free verse) by <~>

You make it out to be more than it is. Really, it's a small place. Sounds fancier than it looks. Still, it's got to be nice to have someplace to go. Someplace with a garden and barbecue grill and some peace. We fish; we sit; we garden; we run; we swim; we relax: all the things the city steals away. For much the same reasons, I put in a pond last fall, and sit with my goldfish and a coffee or a beer, depending on the time of day. We bought it on a whim, with a windfall that came our way I dug it on my own, and the labor was the better part of me for weeks but I needed something, needed and get there whenever we can afford the time away. someone, but I can't tell you that without making it out to be more than it is.

Ranger 30-Sep-06/6:18 AM
Love the alternation, although it took me a second read to work it out. Nice, simple language which works well - something I have yet to master - although the ending left me wondering who the poem was addressed to. Lover, husband, friend, all possibilities. But this isn't a piece to be rushed :-)




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