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Colors of Me (Other) by MissUnderstood

My emotions could paint you a rainbow. My feelings have much to say. My heart is red, my mood is blue. My thoughts are sort of gray. A kaleidoscope of colors. Raining brightly from within. Swirling round in circles. Trying to find where to begin. Yellow, green, and purple. Pink, brown, and even teal. All make a part of who I am. The part of me that's real.

LilMsLadyPoet 28-Sep-06/10:54 PM
You followed a rhyming patterned, and I felt it when you deviated from it...may you could find a way of sticking with it through to the end? I also think some commas, instead of period, would work better. That said, I like this. Simple style, but a nice little piece.




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