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Doubtcohol (Free verse) by drnick

Sweetly I tear into The threshold of me and you. Quietly calling out For strength on a trail of doubt. But poison lips love to Blast words upon and through. Humid with spoken word My cold silence stay unperturbed. The fault fiercely cracked in two The Icon I thought was you. Blatantly broken you lay In my house and wish it all away. I loved what I saw of you A love for a cheap costume.

Ranger 27-Sep-06/3:15 PM
Damned good, I didn't recognise the rhyme scheme until the second read. Last couplet is a killer; having just walked back through town in the rain I had to laugh at what people were wearing, or I would if I hadn't walked to a club, found a queue longer than a very long piece of string and strolled back again.

I meant to leave a message on your blogspace quite recently, actually, but when I got to it I just couldn't think what to write. Are you back at uni, or was last year your finals? If so, what did you finish with?




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