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The Dovina Memorial Bike Lane (Free verse) by Dovina

----Buried in this ground---- ashes of the founder remains of the defier bequeathed to the City for burial here by one who covertly abused her job Drafter Dovina the Drafter to subvert City officials disobey her boss and bring this bike lane before a public meeting whereupon its need was realized and the city acquiesced Dedicated April 1, 20xx by the repentant Carpinteria City Council

Dovina 24-Sep-06/7:31 PM
I agree on putting “abused” at the front of a new line. I’ll look at rewarking some of the other verbs too. Changing the verbs to present tense, though, takes from the antiquated feeling I’m trying for. Picture a brass plaque set in a concrete monument beside the bicycle lane in downtown Carpinteria. I doubt if it will ever be there, but it should. Thanks for the comment and vote.




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