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Shadows In Your Eyes (Free verse) by PoeticJustice

A shadow in your eyes A smile that is fake A piece of your heart dies In a world that we make. The darkness in your mind, The stalker does ensue, Secrets I might never find, Things you never knew. A laugh that sounds so cold, Love thats hidden away, Your soul's already sold, All the things we'll never say. Our love becomes your pain, Your family comes apart, And now I'm driving you insain, And it's breaking up my heart. I try to hold it all in, I put you in this place, I sometimes wish we could start again, As the tears stream down your face. I want to make you smile, It's all become so tough, I can't pick up the phone or dial, Our hearts wonder if we're enough. My love for you will never end, I hope the pain will sink away, With all the kisses we send, Come to my heart and stay.

Ranger 24-Sep-06/4:38 AM
Cheers, PoeticJustice. Thanks for appreciating the time I spent actually reading and thinking about this poem. Bearing in mind that this site is called PoemRanker, what do you think the main purpose is? To rank poems, or to rank feelings? I'm sorry if this makes me sound like an insensitive knob, it's not meant to, but I mean it. What do you want, a genuine reflection on your poem, or ego stroking? If you are looking to improve poetically, this place is pretty good. If you just want to put down everything you feel and assume it counts as poetry that people will want to read, it's not such a good place. Trust me, that's how I started out. But then, everybody's got to start somewhere, it just depends where you want to go. Good luck with your writing, whichever direction you take.

P.S. - don't worry about any shitty comment or vote you get from Edna Sweetlove or any associated crony. We all get that.




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