Replying to a comment on:

Shadows In Your Eyes (Free verse) by PoeticJustice

A shadow in your eyes A smile that is fake A piece of your heart dies In a world that we make. The darkness in your mind, The stalker does ensue, Secrets I might never find, Things you never knew. A laugh that sounds so cold, Love thats hidden away, Your soul's already sold, All the things we'll never say. Our love becomes your pain, Your family comes apart, And now I'm driving you insain, And it's breaking up my heart. I try to hold it all in, I put you in this place, I sometimes wish we could start again, As the tears stream down your face. I want to make you smile, It's all become so tough, I can't pick up the phone or dial, Our hearts wonder if we're enough. My love for you will never end, I hope the pain will sink away, With all the kisses we send, Come to my heart and stay.

PoeticJustice 23-Sep-06/7:30 PM
You guys are so mean. I wrote out these feelings and all you care about is the way it reads. But looking from the last 20 comments about all poems, everyone on this site is mean. I could go through everyone elses poems and call their thoughts and feelings badly written and sound smart and clever, but what about the persons feelings that you just hurt from saying things like that when they are trying to get things out there for the world to see and hoping someone will understand? You should all think before you mouth off.




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001