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Soup Can (Free verse) by oneglove

Live your life Between shadows and spotlights A love of beauty A taste for fright Someone may notice The eyes in the blinds Your silver and gray Will have their time But you're jumping off buildings Just to part the crowd For someone to notice You can make a sound As you sit up high Ants scurry in throngs You finally know What you knew all along It was never home

Dovina 23-Sep-06/1:15 PM
Okay, if that's what you want to say, why not say it in the first person, and give up on the universal "you." And the last line is weak; it needs to drive home, not talk about it.




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