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Shadows In Your Eyes (Free verse) by PoeticJustice

A shadow in your eyes A smile that is fake A piece of your heart dies In a world that we make. The darkness in your mind, The stalker does ensue, Secrets I might never find, Things you never knew. A laugh that sounds so cold, Love thats hidden away, Your soul's already sold, All the things we'll never say. Our love becomes your pain, Your family comes apart, And now I'm driving you insain, And it's breaking up my heart. I try to hold it all in, I put you in this place, I sometimes wish we could start again, As the tears stream down your face. I want to make you smile, It's all become so tough, I can't pick up the phone or dial, Our hearts wonder if we're enough. My love for you will never end, I hope the pain will sink away, With all the kisses we send, Come to my heart and stay.

Dovina 23-Sep-06/1:09 PM
Well, I can see from this how you feel, and that's a good thing. A lot of poets these days put a lid on their feelings, and all we get from them is language. What we want from you, however, is language. The other comments have said it; we want to read your clever turn of phrase and all that stuff. Just don't give up the other.




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