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The Surfer's Prayer (Free verse) by flock

Floating on a sea of troubles, I'm calm. I see the sun set slowly in the sky While the waves gently toss me. Too deep to feel the bottom. Too cold to feel my feet. What lies beneath, I cannot tell. What flies above, I know too well. Who knows what dangers I will meet While drifting on the swell. I thank the Lord for thickened skin. I thank Him for a second wind. I thank Him for the strength to match And every wave I catch.

Ranger 20-Sep-06/12:18 PM
This would be excellent if you could put some more deep, rolling words in to imitate the sound of the sea. Last stanza is nice, although the last line seemed short (not a huge problem though). As ecargo says, beware cliches :-)




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