god'swife12 Sep 2002

You should go through these and give them agood haircut. Take ALL the small unnecessary words out, i.e.; 'Spring feels of joy. New life begins to bud'. Also spring is not like a tree replcing it's leaves spring IS a tree replacing it's leaves. Get rid of every single "that" nothing will kill a piece of writing quicker. Poem, prose novel or letter. Good luck!