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The Red Chain (Free verse) by MacFrantic

The specialist completely as the junction completes me. It's here I fight to retain all and reflect my sinking apolgy on you. You imagine my hands as a chain wrapped red around your neck. You elect to scream when you are alone. Can I reject your sympathies: what sinfully decadent lovelies you construe? I might scream with you.

ecargo 18-Sep-06/9:00 AM
Your first stanza doesn't really make sense--it's as if you dropped a word in the first line. You've got a typo (apology). Some interesting language, but you seem to sacrifice sense for sound.




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