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Singing (Free verse) by ThereseWaneck

Sloshin' Singin'a dripping Tune rollin' Thunder drums Blows Rockin' Lightening strikes Crashin' A sweet sad song... Pickin' up the pitch Splashin' Nature sways An instrumental sweep Kickin' "groupies" Off thier feet... Slickly steppin' steppin' steppin, to the storm of the rain songs beat...

nypoet22 9-Sep-06/2:46 AM
i feel ya. sloshin' is a weak beginning though; reverse the order of lines 1 and 2.

last stanza rocks rocks rocks.




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