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Let Me Entertain You (Free verse) by Bethy

T'was, a long night, so warm and forbidden. I sat in the kitchen, my girl parts all hidden. Gosh, its hot, I thought with a smirk. Looked around in the empty, and slipped off my shirt. Ain't no one here, but my two cats,Hanky and Beans. I peaked out the window, and hauled off my jeans. Now, one might think, what a dirty ole' girl. I turned up the music, and began to twirl. Around and around, I danced like a pro. Yep! Ginger Rogers, Well, at least I thought so. In exhaustion I plopped, right down to the floor. Then applause and laughter, my Mom, at the door.

Ranger 29-Aug-06/10:04 PM
A couple of typos - 'Twas and 'peeked'. Other than that...HA! I just wish you'd change the last line of stanza one to something more subtle; that was the only line I wasn't laughing at.




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