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Dale Winton's Buttocks
(
Free verse
) by
Ya Kid K
Some say they are too rough. Some say they are too pink. Some say they are too hairy. Some say they really stink. Some say they are too soft. Some say they're too oft splayed. Some say they're strangely clammy. Let's beat them with a spade!
Edna Sweetlove
13-Aug-06/3:24 AM
The first seven lines are OK. The last line is trash. Here is my revised and improved 2nd stanza for you.
Some say they are too soft.
Some say they're rather rugged.
Some say they're strangely clammy.
Especially after being buggered.
PS Who is Dale Winton?
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