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moving on (Ode) by Jigg

It was terribly basic No real thought Back of head met brick A lesson was taught Sitting alone now I can see The reasons where gave Don't apply to me Who misbehaved? My system was cleared In a far away place No conscience was smeared I didn't bring a disgrace Just have to find A lover for keeps Must have hair on top of a mind Then all have benefit reaps

ecargo 2-Jul-06/12:14 PM
I think you contort the words to fit the rhymes a little too much, particularly the last line.




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