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Patio 95 (Free verse) by ecargo

As it runs through its repertoire, that flashing mimic bird moving from hit to hit smoothly, counterpoint the trees talk of storms rolling in from the dark west, the black locusts swaying, heavy and hushed and these hours of ease (unease) come undone, and even I-95's sullen roar sounds like wind rising like a sea.

Ranger 1-Jul-06/12:09 AM
This is extremely effective as a 'waiting-and-foreboding' piece, stanza 2 in particular. 'Flashing mimic bird', 'dark west', 'black locusts'. All excellent. But, dammit, I've used reference to wind & sea in the poem I was going to submit today...I think I'll leave it for a while...
All round top stuff as is to be expected and like ALChemy says, I'm glad to see you around :-)




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