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Blessings (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

Blessings flow in various ways It’s there for you to see That He the Maker in His wisdom Made Eternity. One gentle smile is all you need To freshen up your day. Or hear a word of comfort For when you go astray. What makes the world go round and round Or stars be in their place? What makes the rain fall from the sky Or forest fires ablaze? It’s not important what we see As long as we know that There is a hand that’s marvelous Like a magicians hat. For, out of it pops loving hearts So unexpectedly Yet we do not see them around, We look for wealth with greed. Priorities on worldly things Is what captures our hearts And eats into each of our souls Shredding us all apart. If only we could all focus On love, the greatest gift! Then all our worldly problems On heaven’s wings will lift. For in the end material wealth Will fade in love’s bright light. As we with unison will sing To our Maker’s delight.

ALChemy 17-Jun-06/10:47 AM
Good to see you again.
Stanzas 4 and 5 get a little too "Frosty the Snowman" with their metaphors for me (with the magician's hat thing) and I'm not sure if Eternity should be capitalized but the rest of the poem is a really nice sentement and the rhythm is spot on.




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