Ranger13 Jun 2006

Amanda, I can't stop for long but I thought I'd log in briefly to say that I think this is one of the best poems you've posted so far. It has an almost impeccable rhythm (line 24 I think you can afford to lose 'all', and line 27 felt a little short - other than that I have no complaints) which meant that I even glossed over the 'hearts/apart' rhyme without noticing...very rare indeed for me not to see that one straight away. I have to say also that it has a lightness of heart which is ideal for a sunny tuesday morning here. So thank you for the read!

Anyhoo, must dash - I'll catch you later, for sure.