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FM.PM (Lyric) by oneglove

City lights flood the room It’s been years since we could see Now you’re painted up in rosy hues You’ve always been beautiful to me Tonight we’ll be on empty roads Beyond the cable lines You’ll fall asleep with subtle grin I’ll know that you are mine Chorus: All your songs I hated are still on my radio I’m waiting, waiting for their spin Cause every time the needle, pulls me back to you You’ve always been my favorite phonograph Are you on your porch Painted in moonlight? Have you thought of me? Cold rivers in springtime Do you remember When things weren’t planned? The odds were against us But we took a chance, we took a chance [Chorus] Windows down, voices loud [Chorus] I still know every word I’ll still sing every word I’ll be in my car Driving through the night Praying that your light Will be on Will be on

oneglove 1-Jun-06/11:29 PM
so i changed the first two stanzas, which meant i took out the first stanza you seemed to like and removed the you're beautifuls you didnt. the main reason for changing it was my extreme dislike for the feel of the first two verses. see what you think.




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