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Adrian isn't just a girl from 'Rocky' (Haiku) by D. $ Fontera

She was tall and sweet And her teeth clicked when she laughed And she died in June

Paul S 1-May-06/2:34 AM
If you replaced the "ands" in lines two and three with something more concrete this would be better. A good effort though.




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