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Jesus Around Your Neck (Final Version) (Free verse) by Wakeboarder20

Lie, cheat, and steal but spout proverbs with every step. Cover your hands with blood as you climb up that ladder. Just make sure you pray it all away. Condemn, judge, and manipulate. Make sure they all know your act; a successful man of the world all with Jesus hanging around your neck.

Wakeboarder20 30-Apr-06/11:42 PM
Thank you for the compliments.

I too don't like "misplaced" and am trying to think of a good word to replace it. I will very soon.

I wanted to try to switch the places of the negative and the positive in lines 6 and 7. No real poetic reasoning. Just for the sake of doing something different to keep the poem interesting.




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