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The Way of Monsters (Free verse) by MacFrantic

When I'm destroying sunsets I can hear the angels calling Falling oft from lips a-drawling Little drips and quips installing In my mind a mindless matter Scatters priceless indiscretion I need mention my intention When the wrench of my contention Stops the fears forever turning Burning smoke for curls concerning Something with of which I know The way of monsters we do row I disguise in crowding colors Concupiscent ghosts approaching Broaching drams of swirling drink Where monsters short of shadows slink Devilish unrivaled fever Casts a masquerade of sun For fun and fortune's play Melee I leave upon this day Dismay has clasped a frozen fist On wisps of sunset that I missed Come now hell or come high fire Mired in spells of spite inspired

Ranger 20-Apr-06/2:12 AM
Some awesome lines - 'quips installing', 'Burning smoke for curls concerning', 'Dismay has clasped a frozen fist' (my favourite of the lot), 'Come now hell or come high fire (not far behind).
I assume this is about Vikings invading? If so, 'gears' didn't quite fit. Last line of stanza one was good, and was what first made me think of Vikings - then the drink and the fever.
In stanza one I felt that the non-rhmying lines were too slow for the quick, rhymed triplets. And I would have preferred for stanza 2 to follow the same scheme, but I'm not complaining too much.




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