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A South London Lullaby (Free verse) by Caducus

Swollen as the Thames she wiped her breast, laid Aaron down humming a lullaby to dull reality. Daddy’s gone a-hunting. Mummy’s gone a-hiding. Aaron’s gone asleep. Dreaming of a rabbitskin. Swollen as the Thames she wiped blood from bruises, laid Aaron down opening her blouse to feed reality. Daddy’s gone a-buying fuschias for his Princess begging forgiveness from Rapunzel of the tenements, until Friday night when she’s a whore again.

lmp 18-Apr-06/7:59 AM
a torrid subject, to be sure! i feel awful after reading about it; it is like bad news in the papers.

i like how the second verse nicely foretells of daddy's exploits in the third verse. and then it leads me to think that maybe she is fulfilling her own destiny?
if the second verse is what Mummy sings, i think quotes may help.
also, i don't think the last two lines are required. perhaps try changing "Princess" to another word that would convey his infidelity by definition [hint: ends with "-ess"]. the fact that he is buying the flowers means he will do this again, hence the last two lines become superfluous.

well written...




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